At the bottom of the cookie jar Mr. crumb
sat laid all alone. An all around the table sat three kids staring longingly at
the cookie. And almost as if their chairs launched them all out of their seats
at once they lunged for the cookie jar. One kids hand knocked the jar over and
it rolled of the table on smashed onto the floor.
Within the shards of glass mr.crum sat he
wished the kids would stop fighting over him but they dint they kept at it.
After they got over the shock of braking the glass they all ran around the
table and slid onto the floor, not caring about the glass on the floor. They
all reached there hands into the piles of class and reached for the cookie .
But then suddenly Mr. crumb got up and ran
the children stared in amazement as the cookie ran out the door. The cookie ran
so fast that it appeared that he was floating. He went out the door. The
children followed still wanting to eat it. Sadly the cookie got away and no
body was able to eat it. Mr. crumb was running so fast that he didn't not see
where he was doing and he drowned in a puddle.
The
end.
This is really good! I like how you used Mr. Crumb and Mr.Cookie
ReplyDeleteAww...poor Mr. Crumb :'(
ReplyDeleteGreat job. there are a few spelling errors
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